northerly wind —
the flagpole
whistles
or
northerly wind —
the flagpole whistles
to itself
posted by extraspecialbitter at 1:56 PM
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Monday, January 16, 2006
northerly wind — or northerly wind —
posted by extraspecialbitter at 1:56 PM
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5 Comments:
ayumi - well said! between you and me, I agree...
dustin - I agree that the second haiku tells more of a story, but there's a part of me that wonders if it's a tad contrived. nevertheless, I liked both, which is why I posted both.
and if you're odd, you're in good company. :^)
I'll take the first.
Pure image without commentary.
Denis
well, you know, having a bit of story teller in me. i lean towards the second one myself :)
I'm with eric - it reads better
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